RE: Hold Me Down / Original Song for #hiveopenmic 127

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You could do the chorus x2, and add part C. Other than that this is an excellent piece! 😊



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Yeah it's definitely a bit short, I'm a super slow songwriter lol, maybe I'll expand on it in the future 👍

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It's not too short I think, but the current form I think is ABAB, where it could benefit from a third part, a C part, or some kind of an outro. If the B part is the chorus, you can repeat it, maybe building it up a bit to bridge it to the C part, then end with A, or leave it out and use the C as the outro.

I'm not really a musician so take everything I say with a grain of salt. I used to study music theory and singing during my school years but that's long gone now and I can't really remember it all. I doubt I have any voice left either. I did like it though. Singing.

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I've been reading some songwriting books which have been useful in terms of analyzing structure,your comments are spot on. Music theory is definitely my weakness. Every time I start to watch /read an explainer I kind of zone out but I know it's something I need to just do, I'm sure it will help my guitar playing, songwriting, lyrical melody etc. I'm shooting myself in the foot by always putting it off 😂

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