RE: The Ghost of Shizune; Ladies of Hive Contest #107

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Holy... Wow 😁
This was a captivating story that was brutal but fascinating all through. Loooved it sis ♥️
Such a creative way to use the ghost theme, I wish I could come up with stories like yours.

Thank you for sharing this and for making me wish there was more to the story 😁 awsomeness!

Happy weekend and much love to You 🤗💞💞🤗

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If you knew what I had to edit out to keep the story in under 1000 words and keeping it mild for those 18 and under.

In five blows she was finished. As promised Shizune didn't touch grey girl's precious face; first blow disarming, Second blow turns the opponent, last 3 blows in rapid succession to the kidney. Of these, first one will bruise, second one will make her pee blood, and third, third blow is her rich daddy shopping for a princess's new kidney...

See what I mean.
Keeping it family friendly, and thanks for keeping Halloween going @saffisara 👻
!PIZZA

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I belive you and I Wouldn't mind if it was a longer story 😜 but I hear you and when you start writing it is hard to stop, and Keeping it mild.
I loooved it, and Im glad you liked my ghostly idea... Lol

Happy weekend and much love 🤗♥️🤗

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