[EN-ES] TRAPPED | ATRAPADO

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The albino path was too bright for Nicholas, he could see nothing but snowflakes falling, thicker and thicker, colder and colder, yet he had to continue because the presence was still hovering.

In the midst of the whistling snowfall, he heard the footsteps of a figure that he could not define - only a shadow - a specter was what was present.

The tracks of his footsteps were quickly erased in the snow and at the end of the path a small light could be seen, a window, a cabin.

With the snow up to his knees and that feeling of being overtaken by something unknown, he pushed with all his might to a house in the middle of tall cypress trees.

He pushed the door was ajar to enter and closed leaning against it; closed the door, some calm returned to his body, the shadow that haunted him was gone.

Beyond the cozy room filled with red satin furniture, in the background, two figures were arguing; slowly he crossed the space, announcing himself timidly so that his arrival would be noticed.

-Hello? I stopped because of the storm, something was chasing me, I think? -Without stopping moving forward, he approached the couple who kept shouting.

The screams became louder and a disturbing buzzing sound caracoleaba in the ears of the newcomer, after a series of steps, Nicholas was stunned to realize that those who were fighting were his parents.

But, it couldn't be them, they were his childhood parents, it was some sort of strange memory coming to life before him.

-Of course I know you slept with her, they did it in our bed, where you swore you would love me, you piece of asshole," his mother threw the half-empty glass of red wine on his father's white shirt.
-How can you say that, you have no proof, no sense in what you say, come on, are you going to throw away 22 years of marriage for an assumption? -The father wiped off the purple liquid with a blanket.

Nicholas turned his face and as he looked in the mirror he realized that his reflection was not his current 42 year old adult version either.

It was him, about 10 or 11 years old, crying and screaming; as he looked back at his parents, he heard his own voice coming from his reflection in the mirror looking back at him.

-Stop it daddy! -I've seen you kiss her when you looked for me at school, confess that you are having an affair with that schoolgirl.

The father looked with disappointment at Nicholas, saying nothing, being sure that when he turned to his wife his marriage would be over.

Behind his back, the door suddenly opened, the presence was returning, as he saw the mirror again it was again his 42 year old self and behind him a dark reflected shadow was about to catch him.

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As best he could he dodged its capture and leaving furniture lying he ran towards the door he felt moving away, outside the house he could see the night and behind his back the shadow whispered the phrase "it's your fault".

Nicholas crossed the door into absolute darkness, falling on his face, but this time he did not feel the cold snow but a cold and solid surface that wobbled from side to side.

He cleared his eyes realizing he was on a ship in the middle of the most unforgiving storm any man ever wished to be in.

He looked down at his arms covered in starched cloth, with golden buttons embossed with the word "Captain".

Where was he, and what was all this?

Nicholas ran across the deck holding onto the gunwale, he came to a cabin where a beautiful wooden rudder was spinning uncontrollably, the waves threatening to capsize the heavy ship.

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The sea bed seemed to be seen as the boat overcame the gigantic swell, heavy sea monsters were tossed about by the gale, the red and black night was filled with sparkles that gave whips of light reflected in Nicholas' pupils.

He clung to the helm and closed his eyes as a huge wave burst the cockpit glass, he tasted the salt water as the fresh water hit hard in his eyes, again the shadow appeared before him.

He staggered as he fled out of the cabin, he stumbled and in the middle of the night and a raging sea he fell into the water, now he was drowning, from the boat sinking into the sea the shadow saw him shouting "You won't be able to escape this".

Nicholas opened his eyes, the thicket of a Green mountain permeated his sight, his body still shivered with cold, he was in the jungle, on the banks of a copious river, with storm clouds beginning to fill the sky.

What now?

He knelt on the bank of the rushing stream, the lightning began to hasten the announcement of a squall.

Tired, resigned to the torments that seemed to have no end in sight, Nicholas lay in the fetal position listening as horrendous thunder rolled across the Amazonian firmament.

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Whimpering like a frightened child, with the drizzle bathing his body, he could hear his grandfather's voice saying "Don't be afraid Nicco, the thunder is just the sound of two clouds colliding..."

-And they go Boom! -said Nicholas in a loud voice.

Like a revelation, the ideas became clearer and like one who can do what he wishes, Nicholas began to find the courage to speak to the storm, to control its lightning and flashes, to become powerful.

The shadow appeared in front of him, but it was no longer threatening, just a familiar figure, his own self, clear before his eyes.

-Nicholas you have always been your executioner and Savior," said the shadow slowly, "you have always blamed yourself for the separation of your parents, but a child will never be blamed for the problems of adults; as an adult you have faced storms overcoming your weaknesses and setbacks, learning continuously, but you keep running away from yourself and others, from your unlimited power, now you have discovered that you can control even the most insurmountable situation;

The shadow continued speaking: "at this moment I will count to five and you will wake up knowing that you will be able to overcome your traumas, one, no one will ever make you doubt yourself, two, you will be infinitely happy, three...".

Suddenly, silence took over everything, the clouds began to turn gray and dark again, the shadow became a threatening specter again, everything was starting again.


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It was never known what happened, but Nicholas, a lonely adult one afternoon dared to listen to a self-hypnosis session on the renowned streaming platform YouTube; the session did not end up being uploaded by the system, he never woke up because they never pronounced the number five that would free him from the prison of his mind.

The days after the event his body was found, everyone thought he was in a coma due to a stroke or something similar; the reality is that he remained lost, trapped in his guilt, freeing himself as a hero in his trance time after time, he never returned to the real world, he remained forever in the eye of the storm of his guilt and thoughts.

The end


This is my entry for the Ink Well Monthly Fiction Prompt: Storm!

Thank you very much for reading my story to participate in February contest 2023 The Ink Well

Translated with Deepl translator.




SPANISH VERSION

El albino sendero era demasiado brillante para Nicholas, no lograba ver nada más que copos de nieve cayendo, cada vez más densos, cada vez más fríos, aún así debía continuar pues la presencia seguía rondando.

En medio de la nevada que silbaba, oía pasos de una figura que no lograba definir -solo una sombra- un espectro era lo que se presentía.

Las huellas de sus pasos se borraban rápidamente en la nieve y al final del sendero una pequeña luz se veía, una ventana, una cabaña.

Con la nieve hasta las rodillas y esa sensación de ser alcanzado por algo desconocido, empujó con todas sus fuerzas hasta una casa en medio de altos cipreses.

Empujó la puerta estaba entreabierta para entrar y cerró recostándose sobre la misma; cerrada la puerta, algo de calma volvió a su cuerpo, la sombra que lo perseguía se había marchado.

Más allá de la acogedora sala llena de muebles en rojo satín, al fondo, dos figuras discutían; despacio atravesó el espacio, anunciándose tímidamente para que su llegada fuese notada.

-¿Hola? He parado por la tormenta, algo me perseguía, creo... -sin dejar de avanzar se fue acercando hasta la pareja que no dejaba de gritar.

Los gritos se hacían más ruidosos y un zumbido perturbador caracoleaba en los oídos del recién llegado, tras una serie de pasos más, Nicholas quedó estupefacto al darse cuenta que quienes peleaban eran sus padres.

Pero, no podían ser ellos, eran sus padres de la infancia, era una suerte de extraño recuerdo que cobraba vida ante él.

-Claro que sé que te acostaste con ella, lo han hecho en nuestra cama, donde juraste que me amarías pedazo de imbécil -su madre, arrojó en la camisa blanca del padre la copa de vino tinto a medio vaciar.
-Como puedes decir eso, no tienes pruebas, ni sentido en lo que dices, anda ¿echarás por la borda 22 años de matrimonio por una suposición? -el padre se limpió el púrpura líquido con una manta.

Nicholas giró su rostro y al mirarse en el espejo se percató que su reflejo tampoco era su versión actual de adulto de 42 años.

Era él, con unos 10 u 11 años de edad, lloraba y gritaba; al mirar de nuevo a sus padres, oyó su propia voz que salía desde su reflejo en el espejo que le miraba.

-¡Basta papá! -la voz sonó entrecortada, aguda y muchas lágrimas cayeron por su mejilla- te he visto besarla cuando me buscaste en el colegio, confiesa que tienes un amorío con esa colegiala.

El padre miró con decepción a Nicholas, sin decir nada, estando seguro que al voltear hacia su esposa su matrimonio habría acabado.

A sus espaldas, la puerta se abrió repentinamente, la presencia regresaba, al ver de nuevo el espejo era de nuevo su yo de 42 años y tras de sí una oscura sombra reflejada estaba a punto de atraparle.

Como pudo esquivó su captura y dejando muebles tirados corrió hacia la puerta que sentía alejarse, fuera de la casa veía la noche y a sus espaldas la sombra susurraba la frase "es tu culpa".

Nicholas cruzó la puerta hacia la oscuridad absoluta, cayendo de bruces, pero esta vez no sintió la fría nieve sino una fría y sólida superficie que se bamboleaba de lado a lado.

Aclaró la vista dándose cuenta que estaba en un barco en medio de la tempestad más implacable en la que jamás ningún hombre haya deseado estar.

Miró sus brazos cubiertos de tela almidonada, con dorados botones que tenían grabados la palabra "capitán".

¿Donde estaba? y ¿Que era todo esto?

Nicholas corrió por la cubierta sosteniéndose en la borda, llegó hasta una cabina donde un hermoso timón de madera giraba sin control, las olas amenazaban con voltear el pesado barco.

El lecho del mar parecía verse cuando la embarcación superaba la marejada gigantesca, pesados mounstruos marinos eran arrojados por el temporal, la noche roja y negra se llenó de centellas que daban látigos de luz reflectados en las pupilas de Nicholas.

El se aferró al timón y cerró los ojos cuando una enorme ola reventó el cristal de la cabina,saboreó el agua salada mientras que el agua dulce golpeaba fuerte en los ojos, de nuevo la sombra se presentó ante él.

Trastabilló cuando huyó fuera de la cabina, tropezó y en medio de la noche y una mar embravecida cayó al agua, ahora se ahogaba, desde el barco que se hundía en el mar la sombra le veía gritándole "No podrás escapar de esto".

Nicholas abrió los ojos, la espesura de un monte Verde impregnó su vista, su cuerpo aún temblaba de frío, estaba en la selva, a orillas de un río copioso, con nubarrones empezando a llenar el cielo.

¿Y ahora qué?

Se arrodilló en la orilla del caudaloso naciente, los relámpagos empezaron a apurar el anuncio de una borrasca.

Cansado, resignandose a los tormentos que parecían no tener final, Nicholas se colocó en posicion fetal oyendo como horrendos truenos cruzaban el firmamento de la amazonía.

Gimoteando como un chiquillo asustado, con la llovizna bañando su cuerpo, pudo oír la voz de su abuelo diciendo "No temas Nicco, los truenos sólo son el sonido de dos nubes que chocan..."

-Y hacen ¡Pum! -dijo Nicholas en voz alta.

Como una revelación, las ideas se aclararon y como quien puede hacer lo que desea, Nicholas empezó a encontrar el valor de hablarle a la tormenta, de controlar sus rayos y centellas, de volverse poderoso.

La sombra apareció frente a él, pero ya no era amenazante, sólo una figura conocida, su propio yo, claro ante sus ojos.

-Nicholas siempre has sido tú verdugo y Salvador -Dijo la sombra pausadamente- te has culpado siempre por la separación de tus padres, pero un niño nunca tendrá la culpa por los problemas de los adultos; como adulto has afrontado tormentas superando tus debilidades y contratiempos, aprendiendo continuamente, pero sigues huyendo de ti y de los demás, de tu poder ilimitado, ahora has descubierto que puedes controlar hasta la más infranqueable situación;

La sombra continuó hablando: "en este momento contaré hasta cinco y despertarás sabiendo que podrás vencer tus traumas, uno, nadie te hará dudar jamás de tí, dos, serás feliz infinitamente, tres...

De repente, el silencio se apoderó de todo, las nubes empezaron a tornarse nuevamente grises y tenebrosas, la sombra volvió a ser un espectro amenazante, todo empezaba nuevamente.


Nunca se supo que pasó, pero Nicholas, un adulto solitario una tarde se atrevió a oír una sesión de autohipnosis en la reconocida plataforma de streaming YouTube; la sesión no terminó de ser cargada por el sistema, el jamás despertó porqué nunca pronunciaron el número cinco que lo liberará de la prisión de su mente.

Los días siguientes al evento hallaron su cuerpo, todos creyeron que estaba en coma por algún derrame cerebral o algo similar; la realidad, es que él siguió perdido, atrapado en sus culpas, liberándose como un héroe dentro de su trance vez tras vez, nunca volvió al mundo real, él se mantuvo por siempre en el ojo de la tormenta de sus culpas y pensamientos.

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This is beautiful story. Very engaging and well structured. I enjoyed it.

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Thanks a lot for read my work, have Manu blessings

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So, the last count would have woke him up right?
So many people are trapped in their kind of person or wickedness. This is why we must ensure to always come out of our real self to embrace greatness.

It's a nice story we have here...

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Hahahaha i can tell that because ill be an spoiler ;) but yes.

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Your story left me gripped, you handled the suspense very well. And the ending couldn't have been better. Excellent, I really liked that storm in the mind of your protagonist.
Regards @rdsmas

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A real Storm for an adventure without correcto guide, is posible that this come true for someone.

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oh wow!!!

You know, I've actually thought about things like this before... where they have those youtube videos with the specific sound waves to calm your mind. I always wondered.. how do we REALLY know taht they aren't putting something menacing inside those videos! hehehe and I've been afraid to turn them on to try to sleep with them - because what if there are subliminal messages in them? hehehe

I loved the ending to this story! It was so unexpected! But very believable as people can place their trust into hands of people (and channels) that can do so much damage! Just thinking about that countdown that never finished... trapped! hehehe this was SUCH a great concept! Really enjoyed this read :) nicely done with the prompt!

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Thanks you very much, i have this fest too, hahaha never awake of that hipnosis lol

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Welcome to The Ink Well, @rdsmas! Thank you for sharing this remarkable story. It is full of dramatic scenery and situations, and the protagonist is continually thrown into peril. It's quite a gripping story! We are kept wondering why all this is occurring to one person until you reveal the hypnosis and his guilt and sadness at the end. Well done!

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